日本之旅回憶錄：看 Renee 如何在 Enrich English 創作生動的旅遊敘事

旅遊寫作能讓學生將回憶轉化為結構嚴謹的敘述。在本篇作品中，Renee Yu 使用了豐富的形容詞，分享了她在日本之旅中的精彩時刻與小小挑戰。

The Writing: Japan Trip

By Renee Yu

I think the Japan trip was amazing and a bit tiring. We arrived in Japan at five o’clock and then took a six-hour drive to our hotel. On the way, we stopped at a resting place and got a drink.

When we arrived at our hotel, the room was a bit boring. I couldn't sleep well and woke up many times because my bed was too small.

On the second day, we bought a lot of snacks and stuff from the convenience stores. The food was so yummy! We had an exciting trip because the whole family was together. It was amazing! I think I could go to many places if I lived there.

老師評語

Renee 在寫作中展現了極佳的真實感與細節描述，她不只是單純地讚美，而是提供了一個真實且引人入勝的敘述。

• 描寫式形容詞： Renee 使用了一系列表達感受的詞彙——amazing（太棒了）、tiring（累人的）、boring（無聊的）、yummy（美味的）、exciting（興奮的），為她的經歷提供了平衡的觀點。

• 時間標記： 使用具體時間（"five o'clock"）和時間序號（"On the second day"）有助於讀者輕鬆跟隨她的旅程。

• 進階詞彙：

  1. Resting place (休息站)： 用於長途旅程中途停靠的特定詞彙。

  2. Convenience stores (便利商店)： 正確使用的複合名詞，描述特定的零售店類型。

  3. Exciting (令人興奮的)： 一個有效的形容詞，用以傳達高昂的能量和積極的情感。

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